I shared my link of my draft #1 to the group chat on learning pod and two teammates gave me constructive feedback. Veronica points out several grammar mistakes, and suggests me to change my overall structure. Cathryn gave me advice on how I can find scholarly articles and structure my work.
Cathryn thought my work was well done, and suggested me to ask question at first and then doing research around that question. I used to not structure my work like that. After her valuable advice, I used her idea, and found out my thoughts went clearer when writing according to her suggestions.
Veronica agreed with my last point about language barriers when she read my second draft. But she suggested me to put solutions right after the explanation paragraphs. She also recommended me to restructure my paragraphs as she thought “it is a bit odd having examples in middle of the paragraph”.
Erik Yu 